4 - Cornfield
6 - Barn
He couldn't say if it were apples or pears growing on the trees, he didn't take time to check either. The rows were lain in the other direction here and crossing through them was a lot harder here. He almost had to go flat on the ground to get through, with a lot of noise. He only passed two this way before stopping. As he got up from the second row, he felt something stuck between his bulletproof vest and his shirt. Pears it is. Still very small.
He stopped to catch his breath and listen around him. He took a bite from the pear. Still a bit too early but he ate it all the same. He could already use the sugars. When nothing came after a few breaths, he creeped closer to the barn so he could see more.
There weren't any lights in the vicinity, neither at the barn nor in the house. Darkness had grown thick enough to hide almost anything around him. The moon was only a tiny stripe in the open sky but too weak to light up anything but itself.
At the edge of the orchard, he stopped and sat down again to peek around. The house's first floor doesn't show any lights but there could be someone there. I wouldn't be able to see that from here— Wait, what's that? Is the the chimney or is there someone on the roof? The figure wasn't lighted but it stood out against the night sky. Derrek pinched his eye, but his suspicions were confirmed when it started moving around. It came a bit higher before disappearing beyond the roof's edge. Why the hell is someone walking around that roof at night? That drop will break you like an egg.
Derrek sat staring at the rooftop when, from the corner of his left eye, he spotted someone leaving the cornfield. White dress. Damn, she could have spotted me. He took a step back, making sure the pears were between him and the dress. The girl didn't stop, she went straight for the open barn door. The white dress made it easy to follow, even in the dark.
Another scream. The girl stopped, even jumped just a tiny bit, she glanced toward the house before continuing toward the barn. Ok, so it wasn't her. That means, there could still be someone in danger. I need to get some information quickly. This could be an opportunity. His followed the girl entering the barn. He came a bit forward but stopped immediately as he saw the figure on the roof had returned. Holy shit, I missed that one returning. Don't think he saw me, should just wait him out. Derrek sat waiting for a few more seconds and saw the figure disappear again. With flashlight ready in his left, rubber gun in his right hand, he started off in a hurried pace toward the barn door. His eyes flicked from the house's roof, to its first floor, to the barn door, to the roof, first floor, barn door, roof, first floor,… until he arrived at the barn door.
It was full open, swinging inside. Beyond the opening was full darkness, someone could have stood just beyond the opening and he wouldn't spot them, even white dress. That's real dark. Gonna have to use my flashlight once inside. He was thinking it through, but as he saw a shape starting to break from the horizontal line of the roof's edge, he moved inside.
He stopped to catch his breath and listen around him. He took a bite from the pear. Still a bit too early but he ate it all the same. He could already use the sugars. When nothing came after a few breaths, he creeped closer to the barn so he could see more.
There weren't any lights in the vicinity, neither at the barn nor in the house. Darkness had grown thick enough to hide almost anything around him. The moon was only a tiny stripe in the open sky but too weak to light up anything but itself.
At the edge of the orchard, he stopped and sat down again to peek around. The house's first floor doesn't show any lights but there could be someone there. I wouldn't be able to see that from here— Wait, what's that? Is the the chimney or is there someone on the roof? The figure wasn't lighted but it stood out against the night sky. Derrek pinched his eye, but his suspicions were confirmed when it started moving around. It came a bit higher before disappearing beyond the roof's edge. Why the hell is someone walking around that roof at night? That drop will break you like an egg.
Derrek sat staring at the rooftop when, from the corner of his left eye, he spotted someone leaving the cornfield. White dress. Damn, she could have spotted me. He took a step back, making sure the pears were between him and the dress. The girl didn't stop, she went straight for the open barn door. The white dress made it easy to follow, even in the dark.
Another scream. The girl stopped, even jumped just a tiny bit, she glanced toward the house before continuing toward the barn. Ok, so it wasn't her. That means, there could still be someone in danger. I need to get some information quickly. This could be an opportunity. His followed the girl entering the barn. He came a bit forward but stopped immediately as he saw the figure on the roof had returned. Holy shit, I missed that one returning. Don't think he saw me, should just wait him out. Derrek sat waiting for a few more seconds and saw the figure disappear again. With flashlight ready in his left, rubber gun in his right hand, he started off in a hurried pace toward the barn door. His eyes flicked from the house's roof, to its first floor, to the barn door, to the roof, first floor, barn door, roof, first floor,… until he arrived at the barn door.
It was full open, swinging inside. Beyond the opening was full darkness, someone could have stood just beyond the opening and he wouldn't spot them, even white dress. That's real dark. Gonna have to use my flashlight once inside. He was thinking it through, but as he saw a shape starting to break from the horizontal line of the roof's edge, he moved inside.
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